Ok had a good run at this last night.
The briefing was well detailed. I don't recall a picture in there, its always nice to include one to dress the briefing up. But otherwise I didn't see a single spelling error or grammar issue. The weapons pool has lots of selection! And I really like the idea of including the credits in a separate section so great job there!
I'd consider adding a short intro.
Also the MP lobby options are pretty good. I miss having the lower grass option tho
The revive didn't work for us. So we didn't spend too much time playing the mission we gave it 3 or 4 run throughs. Over all it was a pretty decent mission from what we played. I really like playing back on everon!