OverviewNice pic, with shadow and everything. Try to fit the description into a few sentences, you can get into more detail in the briefing. Also might wanna try a Designer's Notes link rather than putting your details on the main page.
IntroVoice Acting! Yes! Don't get to hear that much anymore. Did you use camsetrelpos for this part? If you use camera.sqs you could offcenter him to the left some so he looks centered on TV. What's the angle change for while he's talking? It just goes up a little higher, and I think the angle looks weird. If your gonna leave it, make it go a little quicker, too long of a pause here.
Smooth action, yet try some ground level shots once the TV goes away. Think of how they film TV and movies. Some nice up close shots of him getting shot would be cool.
BriefingTry breaking up the writing into paragraphs, it's easier to read it that way. I'm assuming you meant to write Cpt. What's-his-name in handwriting here. I'd suggest making it left-justified, it looks kinda weird hanging out over there.
MissionThere's one part at the beginning when the caption begins with a lowercase rather than a capitalized letter, looks more professional when the grammar is right
. We annihilated the enemies at the barn with ease, then after I checked the barn, the leader stood there for about a minute then moved on. If this is left in, I'd suggest explaining why, like "We gotta wait for Alpha" or something.
Then when we got to the beach, both squads ran in circles for a minute then went to the water. This might be because of WP placement, try playing around with it or making more direct WP's. Nice visual with 2 squads treading through the water, a good place for music
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When our mid-day splash got rudely interrupted, all hell broke lose. Dudes were falling all around us. This took out most of my squad. As I made it towards the hill, I kept getting mowed down by the guys on top.
It took me probably 10 or 15 tries to clear the hill (I finally cheated and ran around to the back), by then it's only me left. The chopper comes down and as I run to it, I got shot by a lonely Black Op who was laying in the field.
I got kind of frustrated here, so I haven't finished the mission yet.
ConclusionOverall, good mission. I would even out the difficulty somewhat to the first objective, it was way easy, while the rest was hard (maybe that's how you want it). I'd make those guys on the hill a little dumber, they were hitting me through bushes, over hills, all within their 1st or 2nd shot. Overall, a fun play, and a few small corrections would take it a long way.
Topic: (Review Completed) [SP] Maelstrom of Goodwill (Read 6077 times)